Monday, November 20, 2006

Haikus for the Senses

Sound

The raven calls
His great wings flapping
up silent streets

One Deep Breath posed a challenge this week for the senses. This image has been dreamlike in my skull since I saw it a week or so ago. Looking out my bathroom window, I heard a raven call and then it flew past in the fog -- it's wings moving the air. A moment later its mate followed again with a call and then the wings flapping the air. Maybe this one should have been a haibun to really convey what I wanted to say. Nevertheless, the haiku is good. I'll have to think of some other senses haikus before the end of the week and add them.

My poetry can be found here.

7 comments:

Roswila said...

Wonderful 'ku. Clear image, very evocative.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Ravens are such magnificent birds. I love the fact that other than the raven the street is silent. Very evocative.

-llm. said...

Thank you for your comments! I appreciate the reading and the support.

Sandy said...

I like this very much. Crows and ravens are special to me, and it sounds like they might be to you, too.

Anonymous said...

Beautiful haiku! I wanted to call it evocative, but that's been said.

jzr said...

Wonderful!

cloudscome said...

I love this. Good image!